Author: Cerebral

Story: You’re My Human Palindrome

Reviewer: SSZE_A501

Title: 5/5

When I first saw the title I was like Wow, this story sounds interesting. Seriously, I never saw a title like this before which can be quite attractive for me (reader) to read your story. I don’t quite see if it matches the story or not since you only wrote up to chapter three but I loved it.

Poster/Background: - /10

I won’t include this because you don’t have a poster or a background.

Description/Foreword: 8/10

The description was about the meaning of what Palindrome was, I also looked up on my korean dictionary as well so I can know it more clearer and better and that it was quite good that you did that because some people might not now what the meaning of the Palindrome is.

I also loved the foreword how you gave a little introduction to the story. I loved the way you described the story about I love you, because you are like me. I hate you, because you reflect myself. That quote made me just be into your story me that I really wanted to continue reading this story. (So sad, that you did not update yet..)

Plot: 10/15

The plot was okay, but it’s short! Haha, I don’t like reading short stories but I did not take off your mark because of that so don’t worry. It’s just that I don’t think that the story title matches with the plot like 일대일 it’s okay for you to make up a title into a korean palindrome but why don’t you make one which matches the story of yours? 일대일 means 1 vs 1. There weren’t any connections like that in the first chapter of that title. But, the first chapter I was like Wow, never knew Kyuhyun would do that to Sungmin, because Sungmin is nice and frirendly in this story that he just wanted to sit next to Kyuhyun whilst Kyuhyun had some interest when Sungmin came in but not letting him sit next to him. I was like Aish, why doesn’t he let Sungmin sit next to him. Haha. I guess now, Sungmin is going to hate Kyuhyun a lot in the next few chapters. :)

The second chapter was okay, the word the Korean Palindrome was okay which suited the second chapter. I loved the chapter because it was longer than before, I love long chaptered story. When Siwon said to Sungmin that Kyuhyun has changed I wonder why he changed. Also, I screamed when Heechul’s name came out! (I only know him in Superjunior, haha) I was like “Awwww” when I read the part that Sungmin is keep on thinking about “Him” which would be Kyuhyun! Haha, this is such a cute loving story.

The third chapter was really good haha the korean palindrome again which I like. This is really getting interesting when I read the next chapters but it’s so sad there’s only up to chapter three. I would be so happy if you updated haha. I got into the story more and getting to love this story. Hope you update :D

Creativity/Originality: 15/15

From the beginning to the end I think it was pretty much your own style of writing and very original. I never read a story like this before which is good. (I should read more super junior stories from now on. I’m starting to like it because of your story.)

Flow: 6/10

The flow of the story? I don’t really know because it’s just three chapters if you had more chapters updated I would have gave you more marks but this mark is just for the three chapteres that I read so far. The flow was good, not too fast or slow. It wasn’t rushed and messy.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10

I couldn’t spot that much of mistakes in your plot or anywhere in your description or foreword. I just noticed that you put “Heechul-hyung knows what’s wrong with Kyuhyun-ah.” When you don’t need to put the “A h.” in there. You just put “Heechul-hyung knows what’s wrong with Kyuhyun.” When you put the ‘A h.’ In that’s when you call his name like “Kyuhyun-a h come here.” Or “Kyuhyun- a h, what do you want to eat for dinner?” but about yours? You don’t need to put the ‘a h’ there. Even if you write that in korean it wouldn’t make sense because it will be like “희철형이 규현이 왜 그러는지 더 잘 알테니까” But if you put the “A h” in it would be like “희철형이 규현아 왜 그러는지 더 잘 알테니까.” Which won’t make sense. ^^ have to becareful where to put those korean words in the right place and to write it right to make sense.

Characterisation: 3/10

There weren’t any character descriptions and I don’t know that much about Superjunior except for Heechul. I just know and think that Sungmin is the kind and friendly guy when Kyuhyun is the mean and a bad guy kind of person? It’s good for you to write character description of what the other characters are going to do in the story like the roles/parts they are going to take in the story. As well as who else is going to come out in the story.

Writing Style: 10/10

I loved your writing style. The font you use and the colours they were all so good. It was clear and understandable.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

I enjoyed it so much, the whole three chapters that I am going to subscribe to your story to see and wait for the next update of your story.

Extra: 5/5

This was the first superjunior fanfic that I read and that I fell in love with (haha,) I love Heechul from superjunior and i’m really sorry for the late review. I had some technical problems! Hope you understand! :D

TOTAL SCORE : 76/95