REVIEWER : KoreanBiased

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Story Title : Your Everyday Love Story

Author : COOkIesrOCkkeke

Story Title : 3/5

I like it because it totally relates to your story and that it is a big hint at what your story is going to be about, causing storms of readers who like that. However you have to realize that this title is used often and very common to see. I can see why it would be the perfect title for it, but because this is a review, I'd have to mark two points off. It is a nice choice though.

Appearance[Background and Poster] : 8/10

I like the poster. It's cute and the quote is rather a big hint as to what the story is about. It is really nice in my opinion. I like the font and that it's simple, very cute. I like the ulzzang you used, she's very pretty in my opinion. I marked two points off because the cropping could have been better and the poster could of had more color to grab the reader. Although the title is right there, the pictures used of Kyuhyun and Minhee don't scream love story. It screams their personalities and how they feel, so that makes up for it.

Forewords : 9/10

I really like the way that you described their relationship. The storyline was easy to see and read. There wasn't any spelling errors and mistakes in it. It was nice. It really pulled me in to reading it. You've done a great job in your desciption. Although you could have used past tense when you talked about Kyuhyun loving her in the past.

In your foreword, you could have given a teaser to show how they react with each other, or maybe a character description, but it doesn't matter because your description just grabs attention.

Plot : 13/15

A little typical, but it is a really interesting storyline. It's sweet and cute, totally my type of story. For a love story, it is really unique compared to the rest. I've never really read a story similar to this so I like it so far. I can't wait to read the next chapters.

Characterization : 6/10

It is really easy to see their personality and how they like to do things, but a little more description would help a lot into fully understanding of what they truly are like. Of course, in the future, I hope that you'll continue doing this. The relationships that the characters have with each other are visible as well.

Creativity/Originality : 7/10

Of course, as you said, this is an everyday love story, but what makes this unique, is that the storyline is different than many other love stories. This is very creative despite being a love story.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary : 8/10

I see a couple errors in which you didn't put spaces between the words after the commas.

Example 1:

" The alarm rang,waking up a horribly tired Min Hee."

" The alarm rang, waking up a horribly tired Min Hee."

Example 2:

" She made her bed and walked sleepily to the kitchen where she found her roommate,Hae Jun,making breakfast."

" She made her bed and walked sleepily to the kitchen where she found her roommate, Hae Jun, making breakfast."

I also saw an error when you spelled a word wrong so far.

Example 3:

" She knew that Kyuhyun liked Min Hee,of course,and has tried everyday to get Min Hee to realise it."

" She knew that Kyuhyun liked Min Hee, of course, and has tried everyday to get Min Hee to realize it."

Your grammar is alright and your vocabulary could be a bit stronger.

Flow : 7/10

I can't really tell yet, but so far, it is going a bit slow. I hope that you'll speed the introduction up a bit and then when you get into the middle scenes that you slow down. Remember to stop and describe one the important parts and fasten up a bit on the less important parts.

Writing Style : 11/15

I think that it could improve a little more. Try to grab readers on the first paragraph. It would help gain subscribers. The first chapter always shows if the reader is going to leave or not. Try to give good details and interesting first scenes. It is a little plain right now.

Overall Enjoyment : 3/5

The first chapter didn't grab me, but your storyline is telling me to keep reading. I hope that you'll do honestly better. Hopefully the next chapters will get me to read for a while.

Total : 75/100

Bonus : 2/5

I hope that in the future, your writing styles shall improve more. I also hope and I have a feeling that it will interest me a little more as I continue to read.

Overall Total: 77/100